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Observe.
This is how women walk away.

In broken heels
and secondhand jackets,
cigarette smoke in their hair
and no kiss goodbye.

Do not mock.
It is what it should be.

A girl in a car,
hanging a u-turn
on a glistening, empty street.

Her body is a road to be traveled.
A shipwreck to be plundered.
She does not know how she got here,
and she does not care.

And it does not matter.
This is how women smile.

Knowing, secretive,
though her cheeks are sore.
Though the wind
is blowing right through her clothes.

Though there is no good music
on the radio, and no food
in the refrigerator.

This is just an impression.
An idea of nirvana.
A slice of real, live ecstasy.

But do not give it a name.
Just show it, wear it like
designer jeans.
Tight against the skin.

She is ivory, she is easy,
and it is not love.
It is something better,
fermenting at the
backs of her knees.

Flooring her.
Bleeding from her fingerprints.

It is a devastation,
seven ways from Sunday,
but that is how she likes it.
It cannot hurt.
It cannot strike bone.

She's been looking too long
for something to save her,
turning over stones,
emptying her pockets.

And all she really needed
was a quiet space in which to
cast down her roots
and lay siege to her doubts.

Observe.
This is how women are reborn.

With simplicity,
with awareness running deep
as iron in the earth.
With dry lips
and liquid limbs.

With tangling her body up
and losing track of time,
her clothes,
her mind.

But never her heart.
This is what is important.
In the end, it is not about love.
It is about satisfaction.
She cannot have both,
so she chooses the latter.

Do not judge.

She is resting easier
than she has in years.
Believe me when I say, I had forgotten how happiness feels. But I have it back now, and I'm humming with it.

Wrote this in about five minutes. I feel like the ending is weak. Thoughts?

EDIT: Oh my oh my oh my oh myyy. A DD? For me??? You cannot imagine, my lovelies, how much this absolutely made my day! Thank you thank you thank you!
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Given 2012-03-09
Levitation by ~Blood-Lace ( Suggested by Kaz-D and Featured by wreckling )
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hello! :wave:

I have used your beautiful deviation as part of my title poem project entry, found here: [link]

Have a great day! :heart:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow! This is some very powerful stuff! I was especially impressed with:

She is ivory, she is easy,
and it is not love.
It is something better,
fermenting at the
backs of her knees.


and

In the end, it is not about love.
It is about satisfaction.


Congratulations on your DD. It was thoroughly deserved. :+favlove:
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Blood-Lace Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for the kind words and the watch :)
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure!
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by =DailyLitDeviations in a news article that can be found here: [link] Congratulations on your DD!

Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article. Keep writing and keep creating.
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Blood-Lace Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! I'm thoroughly honored!
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ExistenceWeSummonYou Featured By Owner May 8, 2012
Liquid limbs!

Liquid limbs liquid limbs liquid limbs

I'm just gonna go ahead and repeat that phrase for awhile - BECAUSE IT IS AWESOME
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Blood-Lace Featured By Owner May 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much :)
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leakygaloshes Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2012  Student Writer
Those concrete details at the beginning of the poem - the secondhand jacket, the smoke in her hair - drew me in and kept me snared. I quite enjoyed the ending - I felt a rising tension throughout the whole poem, and for that tension to reach a resolution, whether or not people understand that simple satisfaction is all she needs, was breathtakingly beautiful. I love those final two lines - they really speak to me.
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Blood-Lace Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much :) I'm so glad you understood this piece.
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