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Observe.
This is how women walk away.

In broken heels
and secondhand jackets,
cigarette smoke in their hair
and no kiss goodbye.

Do not mock.
It is what it should be.

A girl in a car,
hanging a u-turn
on a glistening, empty street.

Her body is a road to be traveled.
A shipwreck to be plundered.
She does not know how she got here,
and she does not care.

And it does not matter.
This is how women smile.

Knowing, secretive,
though her cheeks are sore.
Though the wind
is blowing right through her clothes.

Though there is no good music
on the radio, and no food
in the refrigerator.

This is just an impression.
An idea of nirvana.
A slice of real, live ecstasy.

But do not give it a name.
Just show it, wear it like
designer jeans.
Tight against the skin.

She is ivory, she is easy,
and it is not love.
It is something better,
fermenting at the
backs of her knees.

Flooring her.
Bleeding from her fingerprints.

It is a devastation,
seven ways from Sunday,
but that is how she likes it.
It cannot hurt.
It cannot strike bone.

She's been looking too long
for something to save her,
turning over stones,
emptying her pockets.

And all she really needed
was a quiet space in which to
cast down her roots
and lay siege to her doubts.

Observe.
This is how women are reborn.

With simplicity,
with awareness running deep
as iron in the earth.
With dry lips
and liquid limbs.

With tangling her body up
and losing track of time,
her clothes,
her mind.

But never her heart.
This is what is important.
In the end, it is not about love.
It is about satisfaction.
She cannot have both,
so she chooses the latter.

Do not judge.

She is resting easier
than she has in years.
Believe me when I say, I had forgotten how happiness feels. But I have it back now, and I'm humming with it.

Wrote this in about five minutes. I feel like the ending is weak. Thoughts?

EDIT: Oh my oh my oh my oh myyy. A DD? For me??? You cannot imagine, my lovelies, how much this absolutely made my day! Thank you thank you thank you!
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Given 2012-03-09
Levitation by ~Blood-Lace ( Suggested by Kaz-D and Featured by wreckling )
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hello! :wave:

I have used your beautiful deviation as part of my title poem project entry, found here: [link]

Have a great day! :heart:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow! This is some very powerful stuff! I was especially impressed with:

She is ivory, she is easy,
and it is not love.
It is something better,
fermenting at the
backs of her knees.


and

In the end, it is not about love.
It is about satisfaction.


Congratulations on your DD. It was thoroughly deserved. :+favlove:
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Blood-Lace Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for the kind words and the watch :)
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure!
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by =DailyLitDeviations in a news article that can be found here: [link] Congratulations on your DD!

Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article. Keep writing and keep creating.
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Blood-Lace Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! I'm thoroughly honored!
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ExistenceWeSummonYou Featured By Owner May 8, 2012
Liquid limbs!

Liquid limbs liquid limbs liquid limbs

I'm just gonna go ahead and repeat that phrase for awhile - BECAUSE IT IS AWESOME
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Blood-Lace Featured By Owner May 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much :)
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leakygaloshes Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2012  Student Writer
Those concrete details at the beginning of the poem - the secondhand jacket, the smoke in her hair - drew me in and kept me snared. I quite enjoyed the ending - I felt a rising tension throughout the whole poem, and for that tension to reach a resolution, whether or not people understand that simple satisfaction is all she needs, was breathtakingly beautiful. I love those final two lines - they really speak to me.
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Blood-Lace Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much :) I'm so glad you understood this piece.
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Carmalain7 Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2012
Oh man, just found out that this got a DD, congratulations!
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i can't tell you how proud that makes me to know that i featured it for a DLD, i'm like a parent vicariously living through you. ;p
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Blood-Lace Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! ^^ Haha and thank you for featuring it as well :)
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Carmalain7 Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2012
It is truly brilliant and inspired writing, i would have had to be crazed to not feature it.
You really put together something special here, i'm just elated to see it got the recognition it deserved.
Best of luck to you and all your future endeavors!
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Blood-Lace Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! I'm very flattered ^///^
Best of luck to you as well :)
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linxinpei Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Student Writer
I...don't know. I don't really feel a sense of empowerment, rather, I feel a sense of loss. Like she's settling for second-best because she knows she can't have the best and in the end she is left pursuing a not-so-ideal life because that is what life dealt her. I find it tragic. Some have commented that this is a poem about reality, but it's depressing all the same. Maybe I read it wrong?

But don't let my interpretation pull you down. If this poem managed to inspire many others and you feel happy with your work, this is already a good poem. Congratulations on the DD (:
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Blood-Lace Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This piece was written mostly from personal emotions/experiences, and it is, I suppose, somewhat about settling for second best. The best I can do to explain it is say that she chooses second best because it is her first best; it only seems like second best to others. That is where the empowerment comes from. She wants what most do not want, and they see it as settling, but it satisfies her.

Thanks for the interpretation :) I always like to hear different views. And thank you for the congratulations!
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Sinclair-milo Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2012
this is refreshing from cheesy writing i've been reading, i like the feel of this, i play jigsaw falling into place by radiohead while reading this. simple breezy with a touch of something sour, GREAT!
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Blood-Lace Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much :)
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NocturneJewel Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2012
This is very different and very original and it flows very well, empowering women with each levitating line.
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Blood-Lace Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much :)
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NocturneJewel Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2012
You're welcome.
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CrematedMan Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2012  Student Writer
It has the feeling of beautifully written free flow writing. Refreshing, congrats on the DD.
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Blood-Lace Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :)
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heavenlytouch Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
But I think the ending is good !
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Blood-Lace Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad you think so! Thanks :)
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heavenlytouch Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome ! I love the way you imagine with your words. You make them so real to me ! Keep on that good work ! Let's seeing forward for your next poem !
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heavenlytouch Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is great ! I like this one ! This is not just long, but this one is so powerful ! Four Thumbs !
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Blood-Lace Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so glad! :) Thank you!
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heavenlytouch Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Sure. And I'm so glad too !
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MissNoko Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012
Your sense of words is astounding...
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Blood-Lace Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for the kindness :) :heart:
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MissNoko Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2012
Always.
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RAE8892 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I have no words. . .
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Blood-Lace Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :)
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RAE8892 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You are so very welcome!
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ItachiWatchi Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012
Sugoina~!
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msfcatlover Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012
...So powerful...I'm floored. Would that I could write something like this in fifty minutes, let alone five.
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Blood-Lace Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm flattered! :) Thank you!
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CyberYoshi Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012
Nice!!!!
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Blood-Lace Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :)
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CyberYoshi Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2012
Yup.
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CyberYoshi Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012
Seriously the best poem I've seen on DA.
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Coupdeplume Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012
This is beautiful. Easily one of the most amazing pieces I've seen on DA.
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Blood-Lace Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh goodness! So flattering! Thank you very much :3
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MandyWarh0l Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Literally took my breath away.
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Blood-Lace Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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nikolass83gianni Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:toocool: ... :star: :star: :star: :star: :star: AWESOME :star: :star: :star: :star: :star: ... :iconplusfav: ... :+devwatch: ... :iconllama3dplz: ... :iconthumbsupplz:
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Blood-Lace Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :love:
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xDeadxNxGonex Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
The ending is indeed NOT weak. I love it! Congrats on the DD!
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Blood-Lace Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so glad! That's a relief :) Thank you very much!
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